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Hit And Run

by melmelp

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What I particularly liked about Hit and Run is that you have two different characters, both from very different backgrounds, meet in a very tragic way. The ending definitely leaves a lot of space for thought about what actually has happened to each character after the accident. I'm curious as to whether the hit girl died or whether the driver has lost her child as she is in pain. It could be further developed into a bigger project. The first act is, to me, the weakest. It seems that the woman has lost a child before...maybe you could play up the inner conflict more. Show that she is now really scared of losing it again. Perhaps she has an argument with her husband...and they make up on the phone. She cries. It snows,.. icy streets...and than CRASH. (Just an idea.) Or what if she had seen the woman before? Maybe at the doctors with the child. She has no idea she has just hit a MOM. Imagine she knows... All in all, great idea. A few Ings that can go.. but not much to worry about. Look forward to seeing you tomorrow...as I realized last night we 're on the same course!!! HA! so funny....)))))

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